I'd love some, if I was sensitive, I wouldn't have posted here
Ok, so I'm not going to say what's entertaining or not, because that's entirely subjective, but there are a few things you could do to help people follow your storytelling.
I first want to say you have an advantage over a lot of people because you have something you want to share and you know what information you want to convey with your videos.
Some of your flash back cuts are really quick (example: the cut to your boat sides at ~1:08) and they don't really give the audience's brain enough to to catch up to what's going on. There's a great book called In The Blink Of An Eye by Walter Murch(
In the Blink of an Eye: A Perspective on Film Editing, 2nd Edition: Murch, Walter, Coppola, Francis Ford: 9781879505629: Amazon.com: Books) that goes into detail about the timing of cuts and when to cut to a new perspective. One of the principals mentioned in there is that humans need a second to process the visual information that they're seeing on the screen. You as the photographer/storyteller/director/editor already know what is being said when you cut everything together, but for most of your audience, it's new, so you have to give them a second to catch up. Screen size plays a big role in this too. It takes longer for the human eye to take in something on a movie screen, or big screen TV than say a 20" computer monitor or cell phone. I know you had some challenges with the cut example I gave you- it looks like you didn't have much time in the cut for a pause, but you did mention that you sped your voice up, so maybe slow the audio down again right before you cut to the boatsides to give it a little pause. You also cut away to your rig on some large rocks using said boatsides. You could give yourself a little more breathing room if you leave the audio of yourself talking about the cut boatsides over the images showing your yota on the rocks.
Basically, you're saying the same stuff and showing same stuff, just doing it at the same time so there is an immediate visual example to what you're talking about.
It's good you sped up the work you did on the door but at key points of that, I would slow down what you're doing for a few seconds so people can get an idea of what's going on, or maybe shoot a couple of close ups to throw in there.
Oh yeah, and I don't think you need to speed up your talking parts. Sometimes talking slower lets the slow people in the room catch up.
Lastly, back to the blink of an eye book- the other main point Murch makes is that he believes that when someone has gathered all the information they need in a visual scene in real life, they will blink. His theory is that if you apply that same philosophy to cutting your film (waiting until you would normally "blink"), your cuts will feel more natural to the audience.
Quick tip for efficient post production work that I found work for me:
Step1: Watch all of your footage all the way through once without doing anything.
Step 2: watch it all again, but trim and organize your footage into clips. The better you label and organize them into whatever folders or containers your editing software has, the better.
Step 3: now go back and begin to organize those clips into a story. (if you're serious type a, you can story board it first, but when I'm just banging out youtube type stuff, I don't do that).
Step 4: go back and watch your whole cut start to finish with fresh eyes. (Sometimes I wait a day or so). Make notes on things that work or don't work for you.
Step 5: recut to your notes.
-Rinse and repeat steps 4 and 5 as many times as necessary until you're happy.